I just wanted to show something i was workin on and introduce myself. Hi im Drawn2Art...get it Drawn to Art, im so clever

Anyway im doin a pic here with a guy who just killed ("deactivated") a female android. I still have alot to do finishing touches on droid/some more work on the young man/possible Hotel background and a poem that will float somewhere in the upper right that reads:

Her existance....
is a mockery of life
her flesh synthetic
her soul computed
her being is a threat to humanity
And i have been chosen...
to end that threat.

The only thing that bothers me about her is i feel you should see a bit of her neck but i cant figure out what i mean...been staring at it too long. And the lineart is messy...i have an inked version i might overlay but not sure..rough and tumble looks cool to me.

What do you think? Any ideas for a different background.Im gonna give her some rips in her flesh exposing some inorganic material.

Well im off for a few days camping. Thanks.

D2A

Nice idea and I like the angle you've chosen to illustrate it. I'm sure most people would settle on a simple "body on floor side ways on", but this looks a lot more dynamic, which is good.

A few points:

Skin looks very orange atm- not sure if that's intentional?

I kinda feel her neck would stay obscured from this angle. Perhaps others will say differently?

The priest type guy in the background- is he fat with claws? A little clarity on his outfit might be an idea.

I take it the girl's hair will be shaded very flat at the moment?

Thanks for the crits and pointers and to answer your questions:

1. Ya problem is im coloring this at work on my spare time on a sub par LCD so the colors are off. When im done ill saturate or something to get rid of the orange tint.

2. Ya like i said her neck bugged me because i figured you should see it but something is telling me no. Ill probably leave it as is.

3. I was tryin to go for a light breeze pushing his cloak/suit ahead of him but it doesnt seem to be working (especially if i put them in a hotel) Ill be fixing it.

4. Ya her hair will be done with more depth as well as some other touchups and tweeks.

Now that im back from camping i can continue with this peice.

Thx Bomu

Anyway, to show that there is a neck and a bit of more feel you could add a slight indication of a muscle on her back joints. I can't come to think what they are called sorry.. Also, you could add a ever so slight indication of color depth to the collar bones. But, you're probably already going to fine tune some stuff already.

I got a feel this would look pretty cool with red/blue type tints.