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Topic: My first Comic :D~~

NZ Matt
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posted 08-09-2005 07:25 AM

heres a quick comic i drew, any crits? bear in mind its my first EVER comic strip so be nice

http://www.fotothing.com/editphoto.php?id=b8d1ab4b015a7e431196fe7ba74430c6

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Bugsy
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posted 08-09-2005 02:18 PM

Hmm you linked to something in your account, so that you'd have to be logged in (in other words I can't see it lol) Isn't there a public url to view the pictures?

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NZ Matt
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posted 09-09-2005 04:29 AM

sorry

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Erock
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posted 09-09-2005 05:11 AM

really cool! you do notice how hard drawing comics can be?

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NZ Matt
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posted 09-09-2005 05:52 AM

hell yes! not sure what to put in what frames, or if its gonna be hard to understand or not.

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Tri_kento
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posted 09-09-2005 06:06 AM

I find comics are restrictive. haveing to fit like 4 -12 ideas on one page. very mind looping. it's hard for me to draw so... small to fit things.

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oneofthosenames
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posted 09-09-2005 09:02 AM

gave it a try, when i was in junior high, just cant do that anymore, it's quite frustrating. congrats on your first ever comic strip, its comprehendable.

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Funkenstein
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posted 09-09-2005 02:19 PM

Flip the fist in the 4th panel so it's facing the other way.... and the punchbag too. That way, the punchbag will be much more readable as being hit. This is because, as western readers, we read left to right. To make effective action and movement, the story should flow along the direction our eye travels. If you have the action flowing the other way- it's just un-necessarily. confusing.

...Unless, of course, this is laid out for Japanese readers- In which case it's fine.
~Dr.Funkenstein~

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evilone
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posted 09-09-2005 08:16 PM

quote:
Originally posted by Erock:
really cool! you do notice how hard drawing comics can be?

take that and trying to do about 500 pages per book! it's already taken me about 1 year just to get to the climax of my book

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<NZ Matt>
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posted 09-09-2005 10:21 PM

[QUOTE]Originally posted by Funkenstein:
[QB]Flip the fist in the 4th panel so it's facing the other way....

Hey, thanks for pointing that out, ill get on to fixing it.

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Zankouken
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posted 10-09-2005 12:56 AM

Nice work Nz Mat. Maybe you could darken the lines so that the effects and background stand out more but thats a preference more than a crit I guess.

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NZ Matt
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posted 10-09-2005 10:53 AM

ok, ive reversed frame 4, plus added 3 more frames, enjoy.

sorry if its too small, dunno why that is.

[ 10-09-2005: Message edited by: NZ Matt ]

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posted 10-09-2005 05:16 PM

Hahahah... that chibi dude rules...

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NZ Matt
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posted 10-09-2005 11:24 PM

cheers, its not too great cos its my first. Ahhhh everything seems to be my first.

EDIT: heres the lineart version, discluding the backgrounds.

[ 11-09-2005: Message edited by: NZ Matt ]

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Tri_kento
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posted 11-09-2005 02:09 AM

umm did u remake that in flash ??..... because it looks very um flash drawing like..... yea.

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NZ Matt
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posted 11-09-2005 02:14 AM

nah, i just went over it with the pen tool in photoshop, then whited out the background.

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Schizotom
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posted 11-09-2005 02:51 PM

i like this and the fact ur doing comic strips is good i for one am just to lazy to do one altho i have an ace storyline for one.

if you wanna work on the backgrounds tho it looks too empty maybe add some tones and action lines.

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NZ Matt
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posted 12-09-2005 09:52 AM

Yeah, thats the next step, im just showing you guys the steps im going through to the finished product.

thanks for the comments guys

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Erock
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posted 12-09-2005 10:04 PM

very cool and funny at the end!!

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NZ Matt
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posted 13-09-2005 07:23 AM

thanks

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Erock
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posted 14-09-2005 06:27 AM

hey have you ever been to www.entervoid.com its got some really cool comic stuff there you could learn from, it helped me out atleast.

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NZ Matt
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posted 14-09-2005 07:08 AM

Thanks Erok, i'll check it out.

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strat3
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posted 15-09-2005 05:27 PM

yeah, you look through it and your expecting it to be yet 'another' hero story, but then that nice little twist at the end o k'ed it

its nice, easy to follow whats happening

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NZ Matt
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posted 16-09-2005 05:16 AM

thanks strat3!

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Yuki H.
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posted 18-09-2005 04:28 PM

I like the bold lines. (Have a thing for bold lines)

I tryied drawing a comic, think the hardest thing is after you found out what you are gonna draw, how to draw it in that tiny space... Especially when it is a complex pose or something.

Good work for your first try... Keep trying because this is good. (I want to see more)

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