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Angelo
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posted 27-09-2005 09:46 PM     Profile for Angelo   Author's Homepage   Email Angelo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
http://www.deviantart.com/view/23408145/

Last bit of artwork. Inspired by "Sleepers" and "Street Fighting Man", by Rage Against the Machine. I know the hands are messed up, any other crits appreciated.

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Webb
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posted 27-09-2005 11:54 PM     Profile for Webb   Email Webb     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Okay had a quick look and things i would say first of nice job looks good

Couple of things i would change first the mouth not sure whats wrong with it... having just looked at myself in the mirror i may suggest that perhaps the face is too far forward the neck should come up under the chin... so at the moment his head looks like its pulled forwards.

The other thing i noticed that pulled my eye was the eyes they dont look quite right with eliptical irises perhaps making them slightly rounder would improve the look a bit and potentially shrinking the pupils a little.

And obviously the hands which you mentioned, which brings me to the final point perhaps the head is a little large or maybe it is just the effect of the neck and small hand i'm not sure...

Anyway like the picture keep up the drawing even though there is no scanner! Unless you have one in the computer labs on campus like me

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AKATT
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posted 28-09-2005 12:15 AM     Profile for AKATT   Email AKATT     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
I pretty much agree with what Webb has said. Really good work otherwise. You've improved a hell of a lot since you first got here, dude; well done!

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evilone
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posted 28-09-2005 08:54 PM     Profile for evilone   Author's Homepage   Email evilone     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
i've played that game b4 its a great game! so you got it from the game.

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Angelo
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posted 28-09-2005 11:07 PM     Profile for Angelo   Author's Homepage   Email Angelo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Evilone - If you're talking about "Sleepers", no, it's a book that later spawned a film with Brad Pitt, Robert De Niro and Dustin Hoffman in it, "Street Fighting Man" is a song by Rage Against The Machine, and "Great Teacher Onizuka" is a manga that later became a live-action TV series and an anime.

Webb - Thanks for the crits mate, and good luck with the Phd... Dr.

AKATT - Thanks, it's nice to know I've gotten somewhere with my artwork

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Erock
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posted 29-09-2005 04:53 AM     Profile for Erock   Email Erock     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
nice job! reminds me of a smoking ad lol.
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Nitro
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posted 30-09-2005 05:54 AM     Profile for Nitro   Author's Homepage   Email Nitro     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
thats really good. his hands are alright for my standards. i'm not particulary good with hands.

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Jats1
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posted 30-09-2005 09:45 AM     Profile for Jats1   Email Jats1     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
I second webb and akatt. Also I think it would look a bit better if you cleaned it up a bit or inked it.

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Zankouken
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posted 04-10-2005 02:40 AM     Profile for Zankouken   Author's Homepage   Email Zankouken     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Good drawing Angelo, even though I have never read more than a few pages of Great Teacher Onizuka I can still see the resembalance.

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StuckMojo
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posted 14-11-2005 10:35 AM     Profile for StuckMojo   Author's Homepage   Email StuckMojo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
not bad dude, just for drawing Onizuka I have to give you 2 thumbs up.

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