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Topic: Burake's First Sin
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Bio Chaos
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posted 15-03-2003 07:36 PM
     
I guess this is what people would call the “turning point” in my life. Mariam was at home sick, and I was in class, just kind of daydreaming, and the teacher told me to get my feet of my desk. Someone at that point suggested that I could use my superpowers to do so. Everyone began laughing, and it made me angry. I moved my body to a normal sitting position, and tried to ignore my emotions, but they didn’t know when to quit. A few jerks at the back of the class began shooting spitballs at me. I dodged a couple of them, and then people started laughing at me for spazzing out. The teacher told me that that if I couldn’t sit quietly in her classroom, that I’d have to do so in detention. I felt my teeth clench, and my heart began pounding. I could feel the blood rushing back into my eyes. I lowered my head to keep my eyes from being seen. My breathing became erratic. Someone walked over and took a look. They announced that “the pussy was crying” and I think that’s what did it for me. I clenched my fist and stood up straight. The desk I was sitting in crumbled at my power. I was pissed. I shut all the doors in the school using my powers, and a few unlucky souls got caught in them as they were closing. Their bodies were crushed. I turned my attention to the guy beside me, the one who insulted me. I could see fear within his eyes. With one hand, I grabbed his neck, and lifted him into the air, some of the girls screamed, and began clawing at the door handle. I crushed the neck of the guy I was holding, and his head fell from his shoulders to the ground. A few of the guys found whatever blunt objects they could find, and began to beat me with them. It didn’t hurt; it just made me angrier. I opened my mouth, but instead of my voice, the screech of a terrible monster erupted. It echoed throughout the building, triggering some sort of odd reaction. Blood began spilling into the lights, covering all the rooms in a deep liquid red light. I could hear shrieks of terror throughout the building, but it didn’t matter, it sounded like music to me. I hunched over; I could feel my body changing. Blood began magically gushing from the floors and ceilings. Energy began coursing through my hands, some of it going unchecked, obliterating a few of the terrified bystanders. Then everything went black. When I came to, I was lying without clothing in a lake of blood. An immense crater at least a mile or two wide, and at least eighty feet deep filled nearly to the brim with blood. It was unspeakably horrifying. Bodies bobbed on the surface no matter where I turned. I thought I was in hell. Then I saw the sign for our school wedged among some rubble, along the edge. I made my way to the sides, fighting against the hundreds of cold stiff bodies. I crawled over the edged and fell to the ground. Police and ambulances were everywhere. They took me to the station, and asked me if I knew what happened. I was too stunned to speak. On the six hundred and eighty nine students in our school, and the four hundred and thirty two residents in the neighboring houses, and the eighty two thousand and fifty four people in the close by mall, only three others and myself survived. One of the survivors passed away that evening from fear, the second was in a coma, and the third was Mariam, who had been late for school, and was at the edge of the disaster when it occurred. I left my home that day. I left, and simply vanished from the world I once knew. And I believe it was that first Sin that took everything I had ever known away from me. And that Sin, was the weakest I would ever produce.  Picture and Text excerpt from "Sin Burake" This is an excerpt from the Burake fanfic which I am writing. It will be up on the site soon, but for now I thought I'd share this interesting if not lengthy excerpt, which applies to this picture. Cool. Artsy.
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) devil for a day? Scare the shite outta all the bullies, mebbe impress some ladies (there I go again...). Seriously though, I'm impressed with the way you've created a scary 'I'm gonna kill you' attitude around this guy. One thing might be to move this to the Writings section, though I can see why you put it here as far as the picture is concerned - that too is good, but it should feature some of the stuff, like the sign and bits of body (aren't I bloodthirsty?)
