posted 18-11-2004 10:12 PM                  

[ 21-01-2005: Message edited by: Erock ]

posted 18-11-2004 11:43 PM                     

i really couldn't read any of the text and the colors seemed to kinda camofloge the whole(in other words u need to space the seens so they are easier on the eyes. well neh i might fo one but right now neh,.

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posted 19-11-2004 10:19 PM                  

Good effort Erock. my advise would be to work on the anatomy of the characters a bit but Im sure that will improve naturally with practice. Also I think the pages would be very much improved if you used computer type for the lettering. you can find both fonts and speech bubbles for free Here Another thing that I think would improve it is along tri's comment: if you did your drawing in pencil, and went over it with a smooth inked line after, you could erase your working lines. I think that would make the pics look a lot nicer. Hope this advice is useful

Also if you were intending on this merging with my, (and anyone else who makes a page) kung fu storyline, it might be better to post it in the original thread, and ppl can just add to it like the speed-painting one. If this is going to be an entirely separate story though, its all good in its own thread

[ 19-11-2004: Message edited by: Jats1 ]

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