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neo
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posted 26-04-2003 04:48 PM     Profile for neo   Email neo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
As my last poem was ignored on here and for the most part on deviant, I'm asking anybody reading this to at least look at it please....

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oxygen_waster
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posted 27-04-2003 02:46 AM     Profile for oxygen_waster   Author's Homepage   Email oxygen_waster     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
well i must say i like it. Especially the last part about how time can't heal a broken heart, too true........

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neo
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posted 27-04-2003 01:02 PM     Profile for neo   Email neo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Thank you .
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Bugsy
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posted 27-04-2003 02:29 PM     Profile for Bugsy   Author's Homepage   Email Bugsy     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
It's cool indeed, but it's more like a piece of prose than a poem

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neo
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posted 27-04-2003 04:22 PM     Profile for neo   Email neo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Its a prose then. I don't know the termanology so thanks for that. So what other types of poems are there and whats the definitions for them Bugs ?. Dont wanna keep makin mistakes with these things.
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Bugsy
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posted 27-04-2003 07:56 PM     Profile for Bugsy   Author's Homepage   Email Bugsy     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Well the difference between a poem and prose (according to my limited knowledge) is that poems work with the regular verse format (rule per rule), and prosaic works are basically sentences after each other (like books and such).
I dunno much about different kinds of poems tho XD Used to learn a few of them in dutch class, but that's long ago =p

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Angelo
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posted 27-04-2003 08:17 PM     Profile for Angelo   Author's Homepage   Email Angelo     Send New Private Message   Edit/Delete Post   Reply With Quote
Well, let's see if i can help on this (metrical = syllable structure - ie number of syllables per line):
Sonnets - 14 lines, usually devoted to love (Shakespearean ones anyway)
Limericks - supposedly funny 5 line poems, which I've completely forgotten the metrical structure of
Ballads - VERY long pieces, usually a story (hate these - I have to remember long poems for my English Lit A Level --> DAMN YOU AQA!!!)
Haiku - short, 3 line poem. Again, follow an exact metrical structure, which I have, in all my wisdom, completely forgotten once again.
Hope that's of some use.

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